Into the darkest forest alive

Hi there everyone, this week for my blog post I am going to be showing you my long write that we did on Tuesday. It was about a boy who got lost in the jungle and it's very good. I think that I did very good on putting in some death into the characters. But next time I would like to make sure that I use some alliteration and personification. What think you been doing in writing? have you been writing stories? There it is have a great day bye.
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I was outside, it was 23 degrees and still very hot. The time was 7:48pm and my brother and I were playing football. We were having lots of fun. Mum and Dad were inside Muma was making some chicken soup for dinner and dad was putting some logs of wood on the fire. You could small the soup from outside and what you could small it was amazing. It was her special recipe that she makes every Monday. When my brother and I were outside playing we herd something coming the bushes my little said that he was going inside because he was getting scared but just said that he was being a little scared cat.

10 minutes after my brother went inside there was a crackle in the bushes so I went over to see what it was, then there was a big as houl and I went to walk inside. I went from walking to fast walking, then I was running and before I had sure I was full on spirting. But then a big hurny wolf came out in front of me. I turned and started to run and was the wolf was getting closer to me by every meter I was so scared, I was thinking if I should turn and let the wolf eat but then I fell into a very deep drop and was rolling and rolling until I went thru the air and hit the ground hard and I was in a lot of pain. Then my eyes started to roll and I fell into a deep sleep and just before I fell asleep I could hear the loud howl of a wolf.

When I woke up was still in a lot of pain but I had to get moving. Once I got out of the seep jungle I still did not know were I was. I tried to walk but it was so hard but I had to keep on going. But then I found a road and sat down next to it waiting for someone o come by and maybe they would stop and come to my aid. Then a car came and I tried to wave them down until they ended up coming to a stop. I got them to take me to my home were the police and all of the family. I was so happy to be home because that wolf could have killed me but somehow I am still alive.