My Narrative Post Test 2018

Hey guys this week for our writing we have been doing our Narrative post-tests for this year. My one is about weird things in the forest. I am going to be doing 2 or 3 parts to this Narrative I think that I have gotten a good start to this story. For me can you please comment if there are any week points in my story. I hope that you like my Narrative story. There it is by now enjoy.
The weird things in the forest

James was just a teen he loved to hang with his mates, play sport and go on some adventures.\
But there was one adventure that he could not go on, no one could go on this adventure.
It was something that the town hall that seed that no one can go into the forest because it is too dangerous. It was something James had always wanted to do. But he knows if
he did he would get arrested for trespassing. Something happened in that forest a few\
years an ago something came from in the forest and then someone went missing in the forest the police and the government went and tried to found the person that went missing they could not found them. Then 4 policeman went missing. The whole thing was that some kids was Biking home and then one of them sore something so they went to have we look and that is when he went missing.

   

To James, there was something about that forest that just creeped him out. It was a dark forest peoplewould go hunting there but then people started disappearing and that's when they banned hunting in the forest. Because they thought it was just bears but when they went to look for the
bears there was died bears and no bullets or scars. It just died and it was next to a lake and there was food and water and all the fish in the lake where died to for some reason. There were no Bullet
s no arrows no cuts or scars. Then they made it so that no one can even go in the forest for health and safety reasons and some who they have never found the bodies of the people that went
missing the police have called him died.

Just a few days ago James friend Mack went missing and he was last seen going into the forest but no one could go and look for them because no one can go into the forest at all. People are starting to think that the forest is magical and people think that the forest lewis people into it and something will happen to the people and some people are thinking of the most Gruesome things imaginable. Until now someone is going to go into the forest. James and some of his friends had been planning it for a long time now and they think that now is the time to do it.
Tonight they are going to head into the forest and then they will cover the whole forest to
see if they can found anything weird at all in the forest.

There are about 15 people coming with James, they friends of James friends basically they were going to go when it is about 9:30 pm at night. It was time to get really they had guns and lots of weapons because who no’s what can be in this forest. Everyone had at let 2 weapons we were going to move as a group as a big group. It was time for us to go into the forest we walked into the first there had been an old place where the park rangers would way but now it was abandoned we were going to go there first to try and find something. We all have radios so when we get lost we can try and find each other hopefully. When we got to the park rangers office we had a look inside Stuff had been thrown all over the floor for some reason but wwhen looked for things that looked unusual to us. But there was something on the wall it was a body!!!

Continues in part 2 of
the weird things in
the forest